let's peer-review our drafts!
Student assistants and "Templars members" will help in this very important session.
We'll look for:
* Non-content related, followed by Content-related, issues.
Non-content related issues:
1- proper heading, top, left hand side, Times New Roman pt. 12 font
2- double spaced, indented paragraphs,
3- proper outline of first two paragraphs: 1. 3-point thesis with proper statement-point followed by a sentence explaining the point.
4- proper "who talks" prefacing each paragraphs, i.e.,
SSM (Same-sex marriage advocates vs Same-sex marriage critics)
Fast Food (FF advocates vs FF critics)
Government Surveillance (GS-advocates vs GS critics)
Police Brutality (Law Enforcement advocates, Law Enforcement critics)
Factory Farms (Factory farm advocates, Factory farm critics)
and so on...
5- Proper argument vs. quote ratio (70% for argument, 30% for quote).
6- Proper quote presentation. Each quote must be properly prefaced, what I call "dropping quotes" issues!
a) the writer must prepare the reader for each quote, b) provide context for each quotation. c) attribute each quotation to its source: tell the reader who is telling the quote. d) avoid "he/she said" attribution-rut! USE THESE: she/he adds, remarks, replies, states, comments, points out, argues, suggests, proposes, declares, opines, etc. e) lead the quote with a colon, example:
Penn State University Professor Ohkenshot denies Marx's claim that capitalism causes poverty when he declares: "Poverty predates capitalism by two thousand and odd years of civilization." or, John Beherman, professor of Biology at Berkeley University argues that____________" instead of just dropping the quote without introduction.
7- proper bibliography MLA source presentation
a) Include in the text the first item that appears in the Work Cited entry that corresponds to the citation (e.g. author name, article name, website name, film name).8- Check for "too-wordy" (long sentences, sentences should be short and clear)
b) No URLs in-text. Only provide partial URLs titles, i.e., domain name, like CNN.com or Forbes.com as opposed to http://www.cnn.com or http://www.forbes.com.
9- Check mark for colloquialism:
"you" (one), "kinda" (kind of), "it is like," (similar to, such as), "okay" or "OK," "real" & "really" (very), "sorta" or "sort of" (rather, somewhat), "pretty" (very), "anyways"(anyway), "a lot," (several, many), "kids"(children), "cops" (policeman), "guys" (men)... etc.10. Check mark for "fillers": "basically," "even," "just", etc.
11. Check mark for redundant adjectives: "totally unique," "completely finished," "thoroughly complete," "productively useful," etc,
this is a great writing center!