Wednesday, March 9, 2016
PHI 2010 HONORS getting your draft in shape
the paper above is from a HONORS student (name withheld) in my spring 2016.
analysis: the thesis paragraph is the most important paragraph in your paper, this is the argument program you will follow. see how her draft has a short clear thesis divided into three points. the word "additionally" and "would also" separates each one. after reading the paragraph the reader understand what is going to follow. in the first paragraph you simply announce the points, you don't explain the points. the points will be explained in the subsequent draft paragraphs.
next, comes the counter paragraph, the second most important paragraph of your draft. basically you're doing the same thing, only with a counterargument. the paragraph starts with "prohibitionists disagree," so the reader clearly understand "who is talking." see that the counter is arguing the point in the thesis, while presenting new points: "prohibitionists also believe" followed by "also claim", these are new points. again, the counter announces her points, which she will explain later in the draft.
see that the third paragraph follows the dynamics T-C-T-C. the thesis nos takes the first point she announced in the thesis paragraph (medicinal marijuana to treat diseases such as glaucoma, anxiety, seizures, etc.). she is now explaining the first point in detail, with outside sources (in text citations referring to the bibliography in the last page of the draft).
the fourth paragraph is a counter paragraph (as it's to be expected), now, the counter is taking its first point. the subsequent paragraphs just follow the same dynamic until all the points have been addressed.